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> | Achievement vs. Acceptance | | | -- By GabrielleStanfield - 11 Mar 2022 | |
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< | Achievement vs. Acceptance | | | The narrative of working “ twice as hard” is one that my parents introduced to me as I started high school and I have heard it reflected in the advice of mentors and accomplished attorneys in the field ever since. On the one hand, I identify with this as I have always been driven and inspired by the outcomes that followed hard work. However, the underlying message behind this statement is one that I question.
As I matured in my academic and professional career, I confronted microaggressions, illustrating that assumptions based on my identity may precede any opportunity that I would have to convey my qualifications. Teachers singled me out (the only Black student in the classroom) presuming that I lacked the resources to complete assignments. Colleagues actively invested less time in their interactions with me, barely extending the minimum courtesy of remembering my name and excluding me in seemingly unconscious but repeated incidents that revealed bias. I took this as motivation, to achieve to the extent that my work product was beyond any critique of laziness, unpreparedness, or dumb luck. I did not cut corners, I was sparing with my questions and I studied the tendencies and language of various professional and academic environments, however, I failed to recognize that my actions were oriented around gaining acceptance. I received the fleeting gratification of good grades and praise for my professional accomplishments, but each step up the ladder towards my goal of entering the corporate law world was shadowed by a lingering feeling of dissatisfaction as I never felt fully immersed in these spaces. | | | I identify this issue as being partially rooted in the concept of respectability. In an article for online newspaper, ANDSCAPE (previously The Undefeated), author Brando Simeo Starkey describes respectability politics stating,
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> | “It instructs blacks to disprove, through their personal behavior, some whites’ notions that racial inequality persists because of blacks’ biological or cultural inferiority. Devotees of respectability politics preach their gospel for two reasons: First, they hope whites will notice when blacks have reached respectability and, consequently, treat black people better, and second, to further black folks’ own interests, regardless of white approval.” (https://andscape.com/features/respectability-politic s-how-a-flawed-conversation-sabotages-black-lives/) | | | | |
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You don't have the space in 1,000 words for extended quotation, and you don't want to disfigure the text the reader is reading with URLs. So you can put a few words of summary in the text, and the URL in a link, as we usually would in writing for the web.
| | | However, the politics of respectability are considered to be an ineffective and self-deprecating strategy for the political and social uplift of Black Americans. The rhetoric of personal responsibility reinforces the superiority of whiteness in American society by framing approval by white Americans as a goal of Black achievement. | | | In conclusion, I am inspired personally by the lesson of John Brown and his thoughts on courage as I am committed to challenging myself to embody the same level of courage and confidence as my classmates and colleagues of backgrounds that are common and unrestrictedly welcomed in this space. | |
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This does very well the real work of the first draft: to get the idea out on the page where you can think about it.
For the reader, the difference between the two unequal parts of the draft is unmissable. The first two thirds, about the past, are vividly personal: they are about you. The last third, about the future, is far more impersonal and abstract. "The optimal path forward requires a shifted narrative away from the generalization that hard work, outspokenness, authenticity and grit alone are the primary factors that equate to success for all individuals in this field," requires 34 words to say what half as many could do beautifully, while focusing as this does not on you whom this path is for.
The best route to improvement, then, is to tilt the next draft away from the past and toward the future, keeping it personal. The real subject is your developing thinking about your professional future and what you need law school to do for you in order to help you best prepare for it. The part that works best for you here, your filling in the context of the thinking you brought with you. you can now tighten and consolidate, so it is one third of the next draft instead of two thirds. In the larger space you can then flesh out the ambivalences you briefly describe in this draft, and make the "ask," that is, show as clearly as you can what you need law school to be like for you in order to help you deal with those ambivalent feelings and prepare you to have the practice you turn out really to want.
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You are entitled to restrict access to your paper if you want to. But we all derive immense benefit from reading one another's work, and I hope you won't feel the need unless the subject matter is personal and its disclosure would be harmful or undesirable. |
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