-- By MerveKirmaci - 03 Nov 2016
Everybody?
The networked sphere has increasingly paved the way for surveillance and calculability of human-beings to commodify human awareness and intelligence. Social relations are reduced to the authority of switches that regulate all sorts of transactions. Our moment-to-moment existence is under the records of data processing systems and yet we think we are still free or be able to make a choice. In contrast, as Dan Geer puts it; “This is the last generation in which the human race gets a choice”. What this statement shows, today, our independent space of subjectivity has been constantly mediated by the corporate powers and the human nation has now lost its autonomy on their freedom of choice.
No, I don't think that's what Dan said, or what he means. I don't in particular know what the last clause of the final sentence means, so spelling it out further would have been useful. This is your statement of your idea, which I'm glad you are making in this revision; it's important to be as clear as possible.
In this paper, I would like to discuss that corporate interests abuse the data-processing capacities of digital platforms which was once restricted to the capacity of a human brain. By collecting and analyzing more data, corporations take away our right to be autonomous which is directly linked to privacy and thereby the personhood itself.
But we are not in a position to destroy their freedom of thought, limiting their rights to learn and to think about what they learn, without also destroying our own. So we need an idea which is not about playing off fundamental rights against one another.
I don't understand this latter point. Patent law applied to software in incautious ways causes much trouble. But trade secrecy and copyright did far more work than patenting, as I tried to show.
The ultimate promise was greater consumer choice, greater amounts of data and greater profit which led to more pervasive material accumulation. Yet again, the agency in the digital platform, like its former manifestations, continues to vie for hegemony and restrict the physical actor from existing in any sort of reflexivity.
The corporate powers in the net only allows for its own ideals and level of awareness. Therefore, its main goal is to exercise upon the individual behavior as means of making profit. With access to constant predictability, it goes against the uncertainty of nature. Like the voice of a politician echoed through radio technology, this new agent becomes the new super organism that embodies political power, economic profit and legal autonomy. Furthermore, it is this super organism of today which tries to annihilate the social aspect of human nature.
Harvesting data is the new trend in which the quantity is more important than quality. As a result, companies like Facebook and Google collect tremendous amounts of data about the very personal details of human behavior. Given that every click brings profit and more predictability, a huge interest is devoted to data access by this exemplars, regardless of its content. They are salient actors in the market now as the power to record and modify the everyday experience is the new legitimate path to sovereignty.
What does this conclusion mean: What should we should "prohibit or slow down," with what legal justification, and with what effect on rights we wish to possess ourselves, and enablements to individual and social growth we wish to foster? We got closer to your idea in this revision, but as the conclusion shows, the development of the idea is still somewhat early.
I asked this last time: why are there lists of references when there should be links in the text, so that the reader can check your support or follow your flow of ideas easily. Writing for the Web is a small technical skill, and here you should be learning it.
https://projectbullrun.org/surveillance/2015/video-2015.html#balkan
http://firstmonday.org/ojs/index.php/fm/article/view/519/440
http://moglen.law.columbia.edu/my_pubs/dcm.html
https://www.technologyreview.com/s/428150/what-facebook-knows/.
http://sk.sagepub.com/reference/sociology-of-work/n41.xml.
The most important route to improvement here is to bring your own ideas to the front. Here we have good summaries of a range of ideas contributed by others, and some organization of those ideas within a structure that could be a platform for your own ideas, but they have not yet shown up clearly. Let's try a draft in which the introductory paragraph presents one of your own ideas in clear, compressed form, then develops that idea through the remainder of the essay by unpacking its relationship to ideas written down by others, including objections or doubts bearing on your proposition, and concluding with a way that the reader could take the idea further on her own. Then we will be cooking with gas, as the saying is.
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