Law in Contemporary Society

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PushkarChaubalFirstEssay 3 - 30 Apr 2023 - Main.RichardWhite
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  The highly general language of this draft's conclusion seems to me to indicate the route to improvement, which is focus. The present draft is the rather diffuse halo of the central idea it doesn't yet state. Reduced to essentials, it says: "I worked for 'management consultants' who were flim-flam artists. The disgust they inspired in me infected my relationship with words themselves. The Sanskrit literature in translation to which I turned for spiritual exercise during the epidemic ended my literary depression and I started reading again. Now I am in law school and I conceive that lawyers wield words as weapons to get their clients what they want." That does very well one of the most important functions of a first draft: to clear away the brush and show the question around which the next draft can grow. In this case, we might say the question is, "so what?" We can condense the existing jumping off point; even if my 67 words are too few, 100 would surely do it. Then we can ask what the generalities in your conclusion specifically mean with plenty of space for a good answer.

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Pushkar - I enjoyed seeing a bit of your perspective on a lawyer's use of words. I am curious how you would recommend developing the skill of using one's words effectively while in law school. This could be an interesting companion piece with my first essay which discusses the other side of the coin, listening. -Richard
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