| I think this rewrite improves the clarity and force of the
statement, at the expense of realism. You're not actually
considering life as an outcast, Elie. Nor should you.
You're asking how you can add an acute sense of social
outcomes, maybe even a commitment to social justice, to
the work of supporting yourself in the style to which you
want to become accustomed.
Your current draft says, basically, that if a world-moving
passion showed up, you'd follow it anywhere. But that's
not the temperament you consider yourself to have. Anyone
could say that the world is well lost for love, and that
in response to a Grand Passion they'd abandon it all for
life on the beach with the object of their adoration. But
in general the world adopts satisficing monogamy and finds
itself living, Babbit-like, with gentle but ultimate
disillusion.
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