Computers, Privacy & the Constitution

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It is strongly recommended that you include your outline in the body of your essay by using the outline as section titles. The headings below are there to remind you how section and subsection titles are formatted.
 

Geofence Warrants, and the Precariousness of Private Constitutional Norm-setting

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Reclaiming personal control

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Ultimately, the easiest and quickest way to begin resetting the role of third-parties in government surveillance is to stop giving our data to them in the first place. Abandoning a smartphone altogether is one way to avoid ending up in SensorVault? . Alternatively, we can choose to carry handsets with alternative, open-source operating systems that don’t facilitate spying. Likewise, technologies like FreedomBox? can allow us to keep under our own roofs, rather than on some third-party’s server. Technology, then, can allow us to begin immediately reclaiming Fourth Amendment rights.
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Ultimately, the easiest and quickest way to begin resetting the role of third-parties in government surveillance is to stop giving our data to them in the first place. Abandoning a smartphone altogether is one way to avoid ending up in SensorVault. Alternatively, we can choose to carry handsets with alternative, open-source operating systems that don’t facilitate spying. Likewise, technologies like FreedomBox can allow us to keep under our own roofs, rather than on some third-party’s server. Technology, then, can allow us to begin immediately reclaiming Fourth Amendment rights.

An excellent draft. There are insightful points made throughout. Your last two paragraphs are noticeably lighter in substance than the preceding ones, which does a disservice to the quality of the discussion with which you set up the issues that really matter now. Some rebalancing, compressing the introductory portion and using that space for less exiguous discussion of the political and technical openings for progress, would be the best route to improvement, in my view.
 
You are entitled to restrict access to your paper if you want to. But we all derive immense benefit from reading one another's work, and I hope you won't feel the need unless the subject matter is personal and its disclosure would be harmful or undesirable.

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